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We are sometime tourists,
forever wanderers
in open topped buses
tie-dyed amongst Mercedes’.
Stringy haired,
smelling of campfire smoke,
our pockets filled with menthol cigarettes,
tin whistles,
and skipping stones.  
We find ourselves
basking in the glow of laughter
under the dripdrip
of cave music.  
Beers and sticky chocolate bars
fill our tattered canvas bags,
alongside leather flip flops,
discarded for bare footed expeditions
amongst spiders
bloodchilling streams
and daisy chains.
Have just discovered this- I wrote it last year in the Lake District.
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Given 2008-12-24
The suggester says, "Lake Windermere by ~tangerinedreams utilizes concrete imagery in such an exceptional manner. It definitely tantalizes the reader's senses!" ( Suggested by fllnthblnk and Featured by lovetodeviate )
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rider-on-the-storm Featured By Owner Jun 11, 2014
wonderful
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SanguineLord Featured By Owner May 15, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The level of description is what really hits the spot for me.
The structure combined with the barrage of images makes this so readable and charming.

And for what it's worth, I've been one of those tourists =)
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krystlcelebi Featured By Owner Jan 20, 2011  Student
ah windemere is awesome right? did you know the only lake in the LAKE district is bassenthwaite?
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TheObviousChild Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2009
Dude, you got a DD! :heart:!!!
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LumiereFonce Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2009
I truly enjoyed reading this. Definitely a peice for reminiscing.
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ketene Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Student Photographer
This was really riveting and sensual to read.
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vampyric-amoeba Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008   Photographer
It sounds like me and my friends.
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Hot-Sauce-Vixxen Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
It's beautiful. I could illustrate it from only one line. I think I may, and I will link back to you if I do. Hope that's okay. :)
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008
Of course! What a compliment!
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Hot-Sauce-Vixxen Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
I will definitely link back to y'all. ^3^
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MuteSerenity Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
I imagine that everything I would say about this piece has already been said by somebody else, so I can only echo their sentiments. Regardless, I really enjoyed reading this; it made me smile, and I could definitely picture everything described in the poem. I especially loved the part from the skipping stones onward. Lovely! :)
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
I am so bad at skipping stones. When I was a child I was really good, but as I got older I seemed to lose my hand eye coordination or something. Now I just plonk them in the water! A little fact that you probably didn't need to know about me. Anyway, thank you!
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MuteSerenity Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
Probably not, but I don't mind at all! :) I can't skip stones, either. I throw them and they might skip once, but then they just splash into the water and sink to the bottom. So I only succeed in scaring the fish. ;)

Also, you're welcome!
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cattieloves Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
Windermere, in the Ozarks? In Missouri? I've been there! It's wonderful and peaceful, and the closest thing you can find to the ocean here in this landlocked place. :*) I went for a church retreat and just fell in love with the place. Have you been to Ha Ha Tonka, nearby? Another beautiful spot in the area...I think that whole area is one of my very favorite places on earth. :)
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
Actually, it's about Windermere in England, in the Lake District. Although I would love to go to Missouri sometime. I am trying to make it to every state, so when I get there, I'll definitely have to go to Windermere. Thanks for the comment!
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cattieloves Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
Haha, yeah, it's beautiful! Head south to the Ozarks and you'll find it. I said something about Ha Ha Tonka - being from England, you'll have to check that out. It's an old castle nearby - yes, a castle, in the middle of the states, lol.

I'll have to make it to England, too! Always wanted to. Let's trade lives for a week. :*)
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cattieloves Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
Windermere, in the Ozarks? In Missouri? I've been there! It's wonderful and peaceful, and the closest thing you can find to the ocean here in this landlocked place. :*) I went for a church retreat and just fell in love with the place. Have you been to Ha Ha Tonka, nearby? Another beautiful spot in the area...I think that whole area is one of my very favorite places on earth. :)
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The-Red-Writer Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I love your descriptions here, reminds me of many times I've spent camping and spending time with friends away from urban areas.

Great work, thanks for sharing!
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
Thank you! Camping is the way forward!
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The-Red-Writer Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Sure, you are very welcome. Keep up the great work!
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Swords-and-Bandages Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Brings back memories...
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
Memories of what? Have you made it to the Lake district by any chance?
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Swords-and-Bandages Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Doesn't matter where it is. It could be the Lake District, it could be a park in Japan, it could be anywhere. I just thought about when I was a kid.
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EternalEmber Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008  Student General Artist
Feels like summer. Love it. =]
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
I know, campfires and flip flops is what summer should be all about.
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y0urstalker Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
smoke trails
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obsidian-sky Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008  Student Artist
I really like the last couple lines, they drive home the feeling of the hippie life very well. Great imagery.
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
Thank you. I think we all secretly wish were born to be hippies rather than members of generation Y!
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obsidian-sky Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008  Student Artist
Absolutely. I think it would have been great to live during that time. It feels more real, probably because it was the first time the youth really mattered.
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DarkDijinArtie89 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008  Student General Artist
Nicely done. I can easily see the images that you potrayed with your words...
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FionnJordan Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008  Student General Artist
Err...Windermere isn't a lake actually.
But anyway, the poem is spot-on.
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2008
Windermere the largest lake in England.
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FionnJordan Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008  Student General Artist
It's actually a mere not a lake. Technically. But whatever.
You know, the only lake in the lake district is Basenthwaite. The rest are either waters or meres or tarns, etc. Trivia!
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evcfenix Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
nicely done. very interesting idea you've put forth here. maybe we are tourists in the city afterall. and our real habitat is in the elements of the wilderness with all those souvenir trinkets from the city to be taken with us. i enjoyed this entirely. kudos on the DD =)
:thumbsup:
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
I think you definitely realize if you get out in the wilderness a bit that it is our real habitat. I find that I am so much more at home in my body if I'm wandering through a wood than wandering through a bunch of skyscrapers. I love the fairytale quality of the great outdoors.
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evcfenix Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
i do believe so too. i've never felt entirely comfortable with skyscrapers everywhere. it can get a bit claustrophobic and very stuffy. i believe in fairytales =)
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cowpops Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
I like everything about this.

congrats on the DD.
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mrt125 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
omg my name is mercedes and i love the car and this poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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westbornchica Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
very beautiful imagery.
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SonyaSierra Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
Oh my gosh...what a wonderful poem! I love the line breaks, they make every image stand out in the mind.
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tragicsleep Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
it's been a rather random and persistant dream of mine to spend some time in the lake district area. i think it started with a short story which had beautiful descriptions of it. this poem makes me want to go even more.

xxx
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
Go, please! You will not regret it, I promise. The number one thing you must do is go for a ride in one of the open topped buses, even if they are ridiculously overpriced. And find a cave to hide in!
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sachamp45 Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008  Student Digital Artist
My heart is crying. So beautiful.
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Llywenlla Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Love it. I was by Lake Windermere earlier this year, so I know where you're coming from.

Traveller :)
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
I am addicted to the Lake District. It's so whimsical and lovely.
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selfrevolution Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
Very visual, I like it.
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sarjan Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
i'm one of the nomads
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tangerinedreams Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2008
Yay! I love nomads!
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sarjan Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
:highfive:
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emothemurdok Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2008
too interesting to go unnoticed.
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